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Author Topic: Looking for feedback for this poster.  (Read 1394 times)
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« on: November 17, 2015, 12:05:47 pm »

we were challenged to make a poster for the promotion of our academy, I've made this so far:



the text is still a placeholder as I don't have the correct text yet.

the Reinwardt Academy, organ of the Amsterdam University of Art, gives education in the field of cultural heritage.
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« Reply #1 on: November 17, 2015, 12:16:47 pm »

You may wish to reconsider the placement of the text.

With all that empty space around the statue, it looks like it ought to mean something that the shape with what I am guessing is "Date and Time Go Here" on it overlaps the figure's forehead so much.

I tlhink it would be less distracting if the figure's head were unobscured.
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« Reply #2 on: November 17, 2015, 12:32:57 pm »



this better?

the pink and black are taken directly from the logo, by the way.

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« Reply #3 on: November 17, 2015, 12:53:20 pm »

Better, yes.
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« Reply #4 on: November 17, 2015, 06:20:56 pm »

the Reinwardt Academy, organ of the Amsterdam University of Art, gives education in the field of cultural heritage.


You may want to rethink the word 'organ' - Though I suspect it translates as something akin to 'arm' or 'branch' in Dutch....  For the English speaking world, we tend to think of the word organ as a euphemism for penis. Or a liver, kidney etc...  In other words, we tend to find a way to take the piss out of it - especially if it's the kidneyWink

If Dutch language only, and it means the same as 'arm', then just ignore me.... Grin
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« Reply #5 on: November 17, 2015, 06:56:19 pm »

the Reinwardt Academy, organ of the Amsterdam University of Art, gives education in the field of cultural heritage.


You may want to rethink the word 'organ' - Though I suspect it translates as something akin to 'arm' or 'branch' in Dutch....  For the English speaking world, we tend to think of the word organ as a euphemism for penis. Or a liver, kidney etc...  In other words, we tend to find a way to take the piss out of it - especially if it's the kidneyWink

If Dutch language only, and it means the same as 'arm', then just ignore me.... Grin

It's pretty common in American English to say things like "so and so is an organ of the state".

Religious people here sometimes call someone "an organ of the community".
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« Reply #6 on: November 17, 2015, 08:39:33 pm »

the Reinwardt Academy, organ of the Amsterdam University of Art, gives education in the field of cultural heritage.


You may want to rethink the word 'organ' - Though I suspect it translates as something akin to 'arm' or 'branch' in Dutch....  For the English speaking world, we tend to think of the word organ as a euphemism for penis. Or a liver, kidney etc...  In other words, we tend to find a way to take the piss out of it - especially if it's the kidneyWink

If Dutch language only, and it means the same as 'arm', then just ignore me.... Grin

It's pretty common in American English to say things like "so and so is an organ of the state".

Religious people here sometimes call someone "an organ of the community".

'orgaan' is used to indicate brances/arms of buisinesses in dutch. I wrongly translated it to that OTHER meaning.
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« Reply #7 on: November 17, 2015, 08:43:13 pm »

the Reinwardt Academy, organ of the Amsterdam University of Art, gives education in the field of cultural heritage.


You may want to rethink the word 'organ' - Though I suspect it translates as something akin to 'arm' or 'branch' in Dutch....  For the English speaking world, we tend to think of the word organ as a euphemism for penis. Or a liver, kidney etc...  In other words, we tend to find a way to take the piss out of it - especially if it's the kidneyWink

If Dutch language only, and it means the same as 'arm', then just ignore me.... Grin




Funny, I was thinking "Wurlitzer"...
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« Reply #8 on: November 17, 2015, 09:00:10 pm »


'orgaan' is used to indicate brances/arms of buisinesses in dutch. I wrongly translated it to that OTHER meaning.


Yeah I thought that was the case.  Smiley  Don't worry, your ability to translate Dutch to English is way better than mine! Grin
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« Reply #9 on: November 17, 2015, 09:55:23 pm »


'orgaan' is used to indicate brances/arms of buisinesses in dutch. I wrongly translated it to that OTHER meaning.


Yeah I thought that was the case.  Smiley  Don't worry, your ability to translate Dutch to English is way better than mine! Grin

most of the time it isn't translating though. when typing in English I tend to think in English too, it's only with words I don't use on regular basis that I need to search for a translation.
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« Reply #10 on: November 17, 2015, 10:06:15 pm »

FINAL VERSION

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making some others too, though, so my teacher can point out what he thinks is the best.
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« Reply #11 on: November 17, 2015, 10:13:43 pm »

I like the way you have used the logo shape, not just the colours, and the way it echoes all the curves of the statue.
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« Reply #12 on: November 17, 2015, 10:18:03 pm »

You misspelled "Dagon." Tongue

Joking aside, I like the final version.

Also, I'm familiar with that usage of "organ," but I haven't heard it in centuries.
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« Reply #13 on: November 17, 2015, 11:11:09 pm »

You misspelled "Dagon." Tongue

Joking aside, I like the final version.

Also, I'm familiar with that usage of "organ," but I haven't heard it in centuries.

Dagen means Days Wink would have liked putting in dagon  instead but I'll be graded for this project.

ah. okay.
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here's a different take:

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« Reply #14 on: November 18, 2015, 02:05:07 am »

I quite like that one!

However the bricks make me think of the Pink Floyd song 'Another Brick In The Wall'. But that might be a good reference to play on! Maybe add "Pink Floyd" in school graffiti style on the bricks, and a play on the lyrics with "Learn to think for yourself".  Wink
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« Reply #15 on: November 18, 2015, 08:54:24 am »

I quite like that one!

However the bricks make me think of the Pink Floyd song 'Another Brick In The Wall'. But that might be a good reference to play on! Maybe add "Pink Floyd" in school graffiti style on the bricks, and a play on the lyrics with "Learn to think for yourself".  Wink

I don't know if I have space for so much text but thanks for the suggestion.
"leer voor jezelf te denken!" would be a pretty good slogan though.
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is Pink Floyd cultural heritage?
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« Reply #16 on: November 18, 2015, 11:41:56 am »

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« Reply #17 on: November 18, 2015, 11:58:48 pm »

That version is much better visually, it integrates the shadow of 'The Thinker' properly.

I like it. Smiley
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« Reply #18 on: November 19, 2015, 10:28:52 am »

FINAL VERSION

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making some others too, though, so my teacher can point out what he thinks is the best.


I like this one, except for a couple of points.

"Oktober", "Januari", but "maart" (first letter is upper case for the first, lower for the third… I don't know the rule for Dutch, but I'm sure you need to choose one or the other).

Typeface: I would keep a single typeface for all of the text, just vary the weight and size. Since you have the  statue to represent antiquity, I would suggest something more contemporary to represent modernity and thus the idea that culture is a continuum from the past through to the present (the 1920s typeface is recent history, and the date in the future is… well, the near future).

ITC Bauhaus is OK, but looks too much like 1970s sci-fi for me. I have a fondness for Template Gothic and Swiss 721.

If you are constrained by licensing and cost, simple Helvetica or Geneva would work.
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