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Author Topic: Celeste: A Love Story Of My Creations  (Read 482 times)
chicar
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« on: October 13, 2014, 01:52:37 am »

When Loves Go Beyond Reality And Dreams:
http://chicar.deviantart.com/art/Celeste-488131801?ga_submit_new=10%253A1413161174
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The word pagan came from paganus , who mean peasant . Its was a way to significate than christianism was the religion of the elite and paganism the one of the savage worker class.

''Trickster shows us how we trick OURSELVES. Her rampant curiosity backfires, but, then, something NEW is discovered (though usually not what She expected)! This is where creativity comes from—experiment, do something different, maybe even something forbidden, and voila! A breakthrough occurs! Ha! Ha! We are released! The world is created anew! Do something backwards, break your own traditions, the barrier breaks; destroy the world as you know it, let the new in.''
Extract of the Dreamflesh article ''Path of The Sacred Clown''
Kieranfoy
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« Reply #1 on: October 13, 2014, 02:41:44 pm »

You need an editor. The grammar is atrocious.
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Toll the Great Bell Once!
Pull the Lever forward to engage the
Piston and Pump...

Toll the Great Bell Twice!
With push of Button fire the Engine
And spark Turbine into life...

Toll the Great Bell Thrice!
Sing Praise to the
God of All Machines!
chicar
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« Reply #2 on: October 13, 2014, 02:53:43 pm »

Yeah or the english function of antidote.
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pakled
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Minions Local 305, at your thervice!


« Reply #3 on: October 16, 2014, 06:28:57 pm »

I've noticed that it's not unknown for visual artists to be...creative with their spelling. That being said, it's a good start. Consider it a first draft. Not a plug, just a resource - smashwords has several free books on how to write, or write better, etc. I've got most of them, and it's helped. There's other resources out there, there's a quirky little program called 'edit minion' on the web, which is a good start towards pointing out passive voice, cliches, etc.

Hope that helps

Keep going.
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CPT_J_Percell
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The werewolf Airship Captain.


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« Reply #4 on: October 16, 2014, 08:41:17 pm »

Try running it through this site a few dozen times
http://spellcheckplus.com
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I suffer from a random misfiring synapse and a bad case of wolfen the turns me into a seven-foot-tall werewolf or a seven-foot great wolf!
https://dragon-rehoming-centre.myshopify.com/
http://purbry.wordpress.com
Kieranfoy
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« Reply #5 on: October 18, 2014, 11:43:30 am »

Yeah or the english function of antidote.

Or, no offense meant, write in your native language. Having a conversation in a language not your first is a pain, writing fiction? Yeah, that can go sooooo wrong.
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chicar
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« Reply #6 on: October 18, 2014, 01:12:05 pm »

Yeah or the english function of antidote.

Or, no offense meant, write in your native language. Having a conversation in a language not your first is a pain, writing fiction? Yeah, that can go sooooo wrong.

I was thinking of this solution myself
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